I'm certainly not offended by your comments but I sure am embarrassed! I had no idea there were so many flaws to this piece of writing, but that can only be expected as I wrote it over a span of two days before a trip. Still, that's not an excuse really because I'm sure it would have turned out like this anyway. Oh man ><
Ignoring the fact that I don't know anything about drinks and stuff I'll move on to other parts of your concrit, haha. I think the thing I wanted from this story was just the point that Green is reincarnated a lot because he's supposed to be looking for someone or something and he never finds it until he meets Leaf and Red because they were his best friends from his first life. Erm, yeah, haha.
I'd love to write more on this and get more feedback and everything but I'm currently replying to this comment on my phone in some remote bedand breakfast so it's getting a little tedious. I definitely appreciate everything you have mentioned in your comment and I'll usethat for future references when I write. And I'm glad you did find things to enjoy in the story as well; at least it all wasn't a complete fail XD thank you so much and I hope you don't mind if I message you a bit later when I'm not using my phone as my connection to the internet.
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Date: 2011-07-20 06:56 pm (UTC)Ignoring the fact that I don't know anything about drinks and stuff I'll move on to other parts of your concrit, haha. I think the thing I wanted from this story was just the point that Green is reincarnated a lot because he's supposed to be looking for someone or something and he never finds it until he meets Leaf and Red because they were his best friends from his first life. Erm, yeah, haha.
I'd love to write more on this and get more feedback and everything but I'm currently replying to this comment on my phone in some remote bedand breakfast so it's getting a little tedious. I definitely appreciate everything you have mentioned in your comment and I'll usethat for future references when I write. And I'm glad you did find things to enjoy in the story as well; at least it all wasn't a complete fail XD thank you so much and I hope you don't mind if I message you a bit later when I'm not using my phone as my connection to the internet.